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Tooth and Claw, Ch2 Pg4

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The page layout is supposed to be confusing! It's ~Art~

Whaddyou mean that isn't an excuse.

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I can see that if you were trying to convey a confusing and hardly-linear conversation with neither parties truly invested, more interested in something else in that moment, then I can see how the use of intertwining text bubbles and overly-complex panel flow can lead to this feeling of confusion, at the expense of readability. If the text isn't very plot-relevant, this is okay, but if anything is important, than it could be problematic. However if only one or two details are important, you could probably get away with bolding those choice words and leading the rest to be difficult to read as it currently is.

Or maybe you were lazy, or didn't care, or didn't know how, etc.

Whatever the case, it is not my place to judge the reason for, rather to suggest improvements.