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Pred or Prey, Pg1

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Warning: contains vore. If you don't know what that is, do not look, or at least don't say I didn't warn you :3

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So, for the first time in possibly ever (I can't recall), I'm working on two comics at the same time. This one is a personal project starring little Miss Linda here:

The other is :iconcowszers: commission, and don't worry, it'll take precedence, but I had the urge to start at least one page from this one today, so I started it. And finished it. I can't say how long it'll be, but trust me, it will be pretty lengthy. As it stands, it's not my most pressing project, so I'll work on it when I feel like it. Can't say when it'll be done, but in the meantime I hope you enjoy the ride~

Oh wow, all characters in this comic are (c) me. Now I don't have to put a copyright notice- .... oh.
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:star::star::star::star: Overall
:star::star::star::star::star: Vision
:star::star::star::star-empty::star-empty: Originality
:star::star::star::star-half::star-empty: Technique
:star::star::star::star::star: Impact

I don't even know what "vision" even means so you can just have the 5 stars. And there's not much room for originality in a fetish comic, but I give you brownie points for Linda's NOPE reaction.

Regarding technique, I'll just go down the panels and point out anything that seemed strange. First, the cat-dude is pulling off a Michael Jackson Smooth Criminal pose in the first panel. His center of gravity is wonky. Linda's arm looks a little short too. I give you points for placing them in a background pretty well, and staying consistent with the positioning of the trees.

In Panel 2, Linda's side-mouth is kinda bothering me, but that's just me. In Panels 3-5, the hands are a bit wonky. They look pretty small, especially Linda's in Panel 5 (even though part of it is in the dude's mouth, check out her wrist).

Panel 6 is horrifying. Poor guy.

This was probably a conscious choice on your part but the cat-dude looks a lot skinnier in Panel 7. It seems like Linda's torso is a little wide, but it could be the hair messing me up. Her punching hand's thumb is a little disconnected and skinny, and I think pronouncing the knuckles on the hand more would help give the illusion of her about to punch something. Her other hand looks like you drew it after drawing the cat-dude's hand on top of it; meaning it kinda looks shoe-horned in. Also dat sidemouth.

Panel 8, dat chomp. Nothing much here other than Linda's hand being a little weird, the fingers are kinda close together and not enough palm.

Panel 9, poor guy.

Panel 10, HNNNNNGGGGGHHHHHH. I like the hands in this one, and how you gave the belly a good sense of weight.

Panel 11, I'm digging the pose. Her hand looks good as well. Her one leg looks like it's going backwards, but that might just be me.

I don't what the heck "IMPACT" is either so FIVE STARS YO.

Overall, I totally dig this. You really only have anatomical problems, but I can tell that you're trying and improving.

DR WORM, OUT.